Narrative writing story

Tornado: Into the storm

“ Whoosh whoosh SNAP” as they trees fell. Jackson and Ethan were skating down the highway, heading to the woods. Suddenly, they saw more and more trees falling on each other like dominoes, as the wind harshly swooshed past them.

Jackson and Ethan kept on skating, until they finally see the tornado spinning round and round. This could kill them, and the rest of Texas. But will the whole town believe them?.

Ethan sprints to the town with Jackson running just behind him. Both of them yelled to everyone that there was a tornado coming, but everyone just laughed at them. They didn't when the trees crashed onto their houses.

Both Jackson and Ethan guided everybody into the emergency tunnel underground. Everyone safely managed to fit underground. As the storm passed a day later, the town was destroyed. Now all the adults, even the Mayor, know that children don’t lie all the time.

Our learning intention today was to write a narrative story. I used my mind map I made to help me form the narrative plan into a narrative story. I also used DRAFT ( Delete, Re range, Add, Fix, and Talk). This helped me find words that might have been in the wrong places, words that have been used too many times, sentences that didn't make sense, and lots of other things. If you want to know a bit more about DRAFT click here.